Koume Shirasaka - Chiisana Koi no Misshitsu Jiken

[Robinxon]

Hello everyone! Finally, I made my first song. I was using UltraStar Creator with Yass. I had the result of over 9500 points so I hope that everything is ok. If not then I am ready to correct until it meets the standards.

[subkei]

Hello Robinxon, welcome to our community!

Let's begin with the good news.
Almost every thing in the txt file are fine, just these tags are unnecessary, the last goes only when you not put a video file in your song folder.

#ENCODING:UTF8
#BACKGROUND:Koume Shirasaka - Chiisana Koi no Misshitsu Jiken [CO].jpg.jpg

And there are a double extension in the cover tag ".jpg.jpg".
If it is a tv size version must be add a (TV) suffix for the title of the song.

Now the lyrics, in the case of romanized words for ex.. "RA-BI-RI-N-SU" (labyrinth), use a lowercase like "ra-bi-ri-n-su".
The suspension points "...", it's not placed since it doesn't contribute much to the song.

For the synchro, you are doing well

For the next, here are some improvements.
Line 2: "wa" with 14 length squares.
Line 3: "To-tsu-se-n" I think it starts 1 square later.
Line 4: "bu-shi-sa no na-ka" as in the previous, starts 1 square later.
Line 5: "A" in pitch 0.
Line 6: "daa" in uppercase like "Daa", "daa-re?" in pitches 8 and 5, "re?" starts 1 square later.
Line 7: "wa" "fu" starts 1 square later. "shi" starts 2 squares later. "ki" "kyo" starts 1 square later.
Line 8: "To" begin 1 square before. "to" with 7 length squares. "fu" starts 1 square later. "ri-" length 9 squares. "ri" length 4 squares.

According to the above, continue with the remaining lines, checking the notes duration cause some notes are a little extensive.

In words like "Dou-shi-te" sounds fine, however, you must join syllables according as heard, so as "Dou-shite".

I hope your progress and then continue.

[Robinxon]

Unnecessary tags were added by the program so I didn't remove them before. Upper cases and suspension points were from original lyrics but now they are gone. I looked through the whole file again and found a few more shifted notes.

I have a little problem with note length in "Dou-shite". I don't hear clearly where it should start and end.

Also in lines 14 and 15 there is whispering and I don't sure if I can leave notes in pitch 0 as they are.
The same thing with "Daa-re?" and "Dou-shite". Is it necessary to set pitch for all notes which are only freestyle notes?

And lastly this song is game version from mobile game. There is in fact full, extended version of this song. In this situation I should name that like "Chiisana Koi no Misshitsu Jiken (Game Version)"?

I attach the revised file in the attachment.

[subkei]

Hello again,
For line 13, "Dou-shite" goes 4 squares later. When you can't hear clearly where it begins or ends a note, Use an auxiliary note as a guide.

The line 14 and 15, it's fine because it's rather spoken than sung.
It's not necessary put tones to freestyles notes but when it can be done, I prefer it. So It's optional.

The name for any short song goes with (TV), no matter if an anime, game or similar as long as it's a short version.

Line 10, 19: like "Ra", the beginning of each line is best placed all with a capital letter. Visually it's better and at the moment of evaluating the song this is also considered.
Line 17: "kai" with length 5 squares.

When you have completed these steps, attach the improved txt file and finally I'll explain the process a little more.
Bye!

EDIT: Koume Shirasaka is the character's name? In that case, correct singer's name must be Chiyo Ousaki as a seiyuu (voice actress).
http://www.animenewsnetwork.com/encyclo ... ?id=116194

[Robinxon]

I hoped that changing artist name won't be necessary. I know that it's real singer name but most of people know a lot more Koume than Chiyo. In situations like this I regret that Ultrastar don't have some kind of extra hidden phrases that you can use to search for songs. I'm attaching a new file with new changes.

[subkei]

All right
The last detail, line 20 "chau" with note duration 14 squares.

About what you say, I agree with you and it had already been considered or at least taken note for a new release. I hope soon

Congrats! Now I'll put you in a group "Creadores" so you can start uploading your songs.

For each new song, previously you may assign it, then you make it.
Btw, when you upload your song, you will have a description/comments section for each song. You can look at the other songs published.

Check this guides http://ultrastar-es.org/en/ayuda/28 for uploading a song and others terms.

[subkei]

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